Slaying Paradise: Legend of The Iron Warrior, Vol. 1

T.V. Holiday

Publisher: KDP Pages: 267 Price: (paperback) $15.00 ISBN: 9798324850081 Reviewed: June, 2024 Author Website: Visit »

Travis Holiday, a San Diego-area police officer who has been married for 17 years, is involved in a horrific automobile accident that could have killed him. His mundane existence is turned upside down when he is saved by a mysterious man who informs Holiday that he has been chosen to defend others in God’s name.

Holiday becomes the Iron Warrior—“the one who is strong, hardened and dedicated to serving others”—and is taken to a place called Carnage Coast, where he’s forced to battle against Sensation, a prostitute who has sold her soul and become Lucifer’s champion. With nothing short of the spiritual wellbeing of the world’s population at stake, Holiday’s mission becomes complicated when he falls in love with Sensation.

While there are noteworthy aspects of the story—brisk pacing, plenty of action, impressively choreographed fight scenes, and the exploration of deep faith-based themes—the reading experience is laid low by far too many grammatical errors. The improper use of punctuation throughout radically impacts narrative clarity. For example, the lack of a comma in the sentence “Go get her baby” changes the meaning in an almost comical way. The sentence should read: “Go get her, baby.”

The author also has a penchant for over-utilizing adverbs, which is so frequent, it becomes distracting: “…surprisingly asked,” “…desperately asked,” “…excitedly asked,” “…confusingly asked,” “…callously asked,” “…angrily asked,” “…cynically asked,” “…empathetically asked,” etc.

Overall, the writing has a rough draft feel to it, with redundancies like this slipping through: “Lynda laughingly fell forward on the bed. She was overtaken with laughter.”

The inundation of such errors hinders an otherwise interesting good vs. evil tale. Better editing is required before the story can reach a wide audience.

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Ramona, California
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