Brushstrokes

Loren Hayle

Publisher: diaofiN publishing Pages: 312 Price: (paperback) 15.99 ISBN: 9780997153200 Reviewed: March, 2016 Author Website: Visit »

This erotically supercharged novel concerns a stock boy with extraordinary artistic ability who works at his uncle’s hardware store and who falls prey to a seductive New York City art dealer.

When the novel begins, Braylon Rush doesn’t have much going on in his life. Aside from his painting and job at the hardware store, the main complication in his life is Tasha, a 24-year-old who Rush has known since childhood. Obsessed with Rush, Tasha throws herself at him every chance she gets. Soon, the seed of a strong relationship begins to grow. But when Tiffany Francesca —a manipulative New York art gallery owner —fatefully sees one of Rush’s paintings, she brings him to the Big Apple, and readers soon learn that the sexy businesswoman isn’t what she seems and that dark, arcane forces are in play.

This story has great potential to be a nuanced and deeply satisfying read, but it is marred by two significant flaws. Foremost is the inundation of grammatical errors, namely the the overuse of ellipses and the misuse of semicolons and commas. (Some of the mistakes are inadvertently amusing, such as, “Let’s go eat baby.”) Additionally, the character of Rush is decidedly unsympathetic: He’s a misogynistic, egotistical jerk who constantly objectifies women and callously mistreats the hometown woman who is obviously enamored with him.

The novel’s very first line (“Some people say… there’s no better sound in the world than fucking a wet pussy…”) sabotages the reading experience before it begins by misrepresenting the storyline as crude erotica when, in fact, it’s potentially much more than that: an emotionally powerful fusion of erotic romance and supernatural-nuanced thriller chronicling a young couple’s revelatory journey to find their place in the world. The novel’s conclusion, for example, is beautifully written—archetypal contemporary romance—but how many readers will get past the first line?

Ultimately, this story is hampered by writing errors and unfortunate narrative judgment, despite an intriguing and promising concept.

Also available as an ebook.

Author's Current Residence
Cleveland, Ohio
Author's Home Town
Cleveland, Ohio